Post-16 Feedback Form
Focus:
(21/02/14)
Essay
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What are
the pros and cons of globalisation?
Level 2
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Strengths:
1.
You have
started to include the appropriate terminology for the task but this is not
developed throughout the essay. (4 marks)
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Areas for improvement:
1.
Develop your explanation
ensuring you refer to current Media theories to strengthen and build an
argument for the question. On the whole, it was not clear which question you
were answering. (8 marks)
2.
Develop your use
of examples and use them to expand your ideas of the pros and cons of
globalisation. (6 marks)
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Resulting Actions (student response):
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To gain a
Level 4:
Explanation:
16-20 marks
Candidates
adapt their learning to the specific
question in an excellent fashion and make connections in order to make a
coherent argument.
The answer provides a clear, fluent balance of Media theories and knowledge of industries and texts and an informed personal engagement
with issues and debates.
Use of
examples: 16-20 marks
Examples of
theories, texts and industry knowledge are clearly connected together in the answer. History and the future are
integrated into the discussion with conviction.
Use of
terminology: 8-10 marks
Throughout
the answer, material presented is informed by Global Media theory and the
command of the appropriate
conceptual and theoretical language is excellent.
‘The inexorable integration of markets,
nation-states, and technologies to a degree never
witnessed before, in a way that is
enabling individuals, corporations and nation-states to reach around the world
farther, faster, deeper and cheaper than ever before . . . the spread of free
market capitalism to virtually every country in the world.’ (T.L. Friedman, The Lexus and the Olive Tree, 1999, p. 7-8[LMS2] ).
Worldwide, we now communicate and explore each
other’s cultures through travel and trade, the world has become interconnected.
Products can be transported around the world in days and even hours[LMS3] . We are in an ever
growing global economy and the slightest changes can have a knock on effect
around the world. Globalisation helps small companies expand and evolve to suit
the consumer[LMS4] . The richest
companies are not local businesses but multinational corporations; Coca Cola is
a prime example of a company that has excelled with globalisation.
Globalisation is a result of four main
factors: Improvements of communications, improvements in trade, freedom of
trade and labour availability and skills. Improvements in communication have
excelled over decades, the Internet and mobile technologies have resulted in
quicker and easier communication all over the world, whether it’s for social
use or for business[LMS5] .
Countries trade with each other when, on their own, they do not have the
resources, or capacity to satisfy their own needs and wants[LMS6] . By developing and exploiting their domestic
scarce resources, countries can produce a surplus, and trade this for the
resources they need. Clear evidence of trading over long distances dates back
at least 9,000 years, though long distance trade probably goes back much
further to the domestication of pack animals and the invention of ships.
Today, international trade is at the heart of the global economy and is
responsible for much of the development and prosperity of the modern
industrialised world. Larger cargo ships had meant that the cost of
transporting goods to and from counties has decreased, we can also now be on a
completely opposite side of the world within hours. Freedom of trade helps to
remove the barriers between countries. Most nations today are
members of the World Trade Organization (WTO) multilateral trade agreements[LMS7] . However, most governments still impose some protectionist
policies that are intended to support local employment, such as applying
tariffs to imports or subsidies to exports. Governments may also restrict free
trade to limit exports of natural resources. Other barriers that may hinder
trade include import quotas, taxes, and non-tariff barriers, such as regulatory
legislation.
The World Trade
Organization (WTO) is currently now under fire for failing to take into account
labour standards or the environmental impact of trade. Labour
availability and skills in countries such as India have
lower labour costs (about a third of that of the UK) and also high skill
levels. Labour intensive industries such as clothing can take advantage of
cheaper labour costs and reduced legal restrictions in less economically developed
countries. Companies such as Primark have been exemplified for exploiting
children workers in under developed countries[LMS8] .
Globalisation
has resulted in an increase in international trade, companies operating in more
than one country (multinational corporations), greater dependence on the global
economy, a small change can have a knock on effect around the world, freer
movement of capital goods and services and recognition of companies such as McDonalds[LMS9] in Less Economically developed countries. Globalisation is blamed for many of
the ills of the modern world, but it is also praised for bringing unprecedented
prosperity. Although globalisation is probably
helping to create more wealth in developing countries but it doesn’t help to
close the gap between the world's poorest countries and the world's richest.
There are many pros and cons to globalisation. Globalisation
has increased free trade between nations, increased liquidity of capital has
allowed investors in developed nations to invest in underdeveloped nations, corporations
have greater flexibility to operate across borders, global media ties the world
together[LMS10] ,
[LMS8]An
expansion is needed here – use Primark as a detailed example. You can Google
articles for it.
[LMS9]This
could also link to Coca Cola. What impact has this particular company had with
globalisation and is it a pro or a con? Why?
[LMS10]An
example would help boost your marks.
If this is your conclusion, it doesn’t match the rest
of your essay and would have worked well as an introduction.
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